I originally ended the piece with "But I kept packing" after the second time-clock sequence. This morning, though, that third time-clock sequence, the dream sequence--kind of wrote itself.
It seems a bit creepy to me, read in the context of the other two essays I've written for this class, but maybe all the birth stuff in those is what gave me the idea for that third section, and maybe without those other two essays in mind, it can work for this essay.
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Totally. It can work, but I think you need a little more time with the metaphors to make them less jarring. But I like where you're going!
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